I need your opininion,do u like my writing style?

I will be honest, I did not read it all. It feels like you are trying to make it sound good by using formal phrases and adding bigger words, but it makes it seem unnatural and it does not flow well. Try to make your writing more original to make it stand apart from the other novels that have been written just like this one. Also, why does it say skinny students? That sounded weird. If you need further help, feel free to email me.